Game Of Thrones:
Will:
In the opening scene Will is scared and wants to leave, we learn this because he says "We should start back" he wants this but he cant because he is with Ser Waymar who is a higher class character and he orders Will to stay in order to finish the job.
Gared:
In the same scene Gared is also worried that something bad is going on because of what Will has told him and we learn this from him saying "We should head back to the wall" he also wants higher authority as he is telling them what to do, he only does this because he is older than them and therefore thinks he has a right to lead, although he cant get what he wants because Ser Waymar is in charge. Gared feels that the three of them have completed what they set out to do and therefore should go back so that nothing bad will happen to them, we know this from him saying "Mormont said we should track 'em. We tracked 'em."
Ser Waymar:
From the opening scene we know that Ser Waymar wants to stay in the forest and see the dead bodies himself so that he can do his job and then report back to higher authority about how the people where killed, we learn this from him saying "You don't think Mormont will ask us how they died?" he wants this although he cant have what he wants as when he goes to the dead bodies they have disappeared and he then cant complete his job and wont be able to explain this.
Meeting Minutes:
Style
The style of Walking Dead is different to the Game of Thrones. The styles differ by the time period that the shows are set in. Game of thrones is set in a medieval period in a fictional and fantasy land of Westeros and as such they are lacking in the availability of technology available in the walking dead.
Content
In Game of thrones we see Ser Waymar and the others track the wildlings beyond the wall, after which they discover that they have been killed by an unknown entity, this entity then attacks them leaving only Will to survive.
The title sequence. We then see Will in a completely different area looking exhausted, and some soldiers catch up to him on horse-back and capture him, after this we are introduced to the Stark household and then see Ned Stark execute Will.
In the Walking Dead the story starts with Rick Grimes searching for fuel amid a deserted road, various bits of abandoned cars lay about and rick walks to a nearby gas station where he sees a crudely drawn “no gas sign” upon seeing this he prepares to return to his vehicle but stops when he sees a little girl pick up a teddy bear and walk away. Believing that this little girl is alone and unprotected Rick tries to console her as she walks away from him, she turns around to reveal that she is a walker and is missing part of her cheek, she then proceeds to attack him prompting Rick to shoot her in the head. title sequence. After this we are taken back to before the zombie event, Rick Grimes and his co-worker Shane are talking in their squad car when police dispatch interrupts their conversation and requests their assistance in a police chase, racing off to the scene they arrive with another squad car and set up a spike strip before blocking the road with their vehicles and waiting for the suspect.
Not long after they arrive and promptly hit the spike strip, flipping their car and giving Rick and the other officers a chance to close in.
The suspects crawl out of their car and in the ensuing firefight Rick is injured.
Narrative Structure
In the opening scene for Game Of Thrones the story starts at the start of an event, Ser Waymar and co. are heading beyond the wall to track the wildlings, after this scene and the credit sequence we see that follow on directly from that chronologically.
In the opening scene of the walking dead we see rick Grimes searching for fuel after the zombie apocalypse, we can get a sense of how soon because he is still wearing his police uniform from before the event and they are fairly clean (albeit rather lived in).
After the credit sequence we see Rick Grimes before the event at his job, he is wearing his police uniform and everything is fine, this event takes place before the opening scene in terms of time but the audience is shown it second to accommodate the structure of the story.
Genre
The walking dead is a horror where as game of thrones is more of a fantasy story, these are two very different genres but game of thrones and the walking dead share some similarities.
These can be seen in the elements of suspense in the two shows for example the first scene in game of thrones is very similar in style to the first scene in the walking dead, the characters are searching for something in a very quiet place, there are signs in that place that something terrible has happened and that there could be danger there with a kind of climax towards the end of the scene.
This climax results in a “monster” that it is assumed is responsible for the desolation being either killed or escaped from.
Target audience
The target audience for the Walking Dead is a range and diversity. With the mixture of races in the walking dead it creates a diverse background that can intrigue the audience. The Walking Dead creates mid season finales to captivate the audience and create temptation and anticipation for the next episode in 3-4 months. The target audience is anyone from 16+ really although the rating is an 18 most young people what’s the series as they feel it is good entertainment.
With Game Of Thrones on the other hand they both have similar target audiences. It targets the more young adults as the language used in the TV series is of a high class. Although it contradicts its self with a lot of young audiences being entertained by what content is in the TV series.
Main character information:
Age: 20
Name: Adamelia Cholland
Eye colour: Yellow
Clothes: Arsenal football kit and football boots
Things in her pocket: iPhone 6, Chewing gum, cash
Tattoo: Arsenal cannon over her heart
Height: 6ft2
Other characters:
Arsene Wenger - Mafia boss
Mesut Ozil - Part of the mafia
Dwayne Johnson - father of girl and a cop
Settings: Prison, Arsenal Stadium, London
Ideas: Prison break, bank robbery, car chases, fight scenes
Girl breaks out of prison and tries to get revenge on those who put her there - or the prison break is a scene that happens already and then the rest of the film is leading up to that scene.
Policeman helps get her out of prison.
Draft script: The Three Brothers
Script Feedback:
Length - The length is 5-10 pages and doesn't need anything taken out of it, it needs a little bit more added at the end, I agree with this although it will have a bit more added to the end because I didn't get to finish it and therefore it would've had something to finish the script.
Format - Nothing wrong with the grammar and no spelling errors, also its clear which scenes are which and the indents are done correctly.
Structure - The beginning, middle and end are clearly shown and the story is set out really well and moves along at a good pace, it needs more excitement, maybe some action in between the dialogue.
Dialogue - The brothers speak similar to each other but Death clearly speaks different to them and it shows the difference and conflict between the characters, delete an 'o' in loose.
A. General series arc:
The general series arc'c in my crime drama are mainly focused around each character, there is a narrative thread around the main character Adamelia Cholland, she wants to get out of prison and get revenge on the people responsible for putting her there, however she cant get out of prison alone, she needs someones help and the people responsible for putting her in prison are famous and have security at their houses and where they work and so it isn'y possible for her to do this, however she may find a way.
Also there is a narrative thread on her father Dwayne Johnson as he wants his daughter to live a normal life without crime and he also wants to live a happy life and do his job to protect the city, he cant however get what he wants because his daughter is too determined and will not stop, also it makes his life difficult because he is a police officer and has to his job to stop crime although his daughter is the one causing all the crimes in the city and therefore he has to be really careful with what he does and who he sides with.
Its a development of one story in which Adamelia Cholland is breaking out of prison and finishing what she started and is going to get rid of anyone who gets in her way, she will be hunting down each individual person that is responsible for putting her in prison and build her skills towards finding the Mafia and taking out there leader, because she has broken out of prison she is also on the run from the cops and therefore she needs to lay low as well.
B & C. Episode arc & Openning:
In the first episode it will be Adamelia Cholland finding ways to break out of prison and her dad Dwayne Johnson helping her break out, the episode will introduce those two characters mainly although there will be some back story told as to why she is in prison, who put her there, and a little description of the people responsible.
At the start of the episode there will be a birds eye view of Adamelia Cholland sitting in her prison cell, at first it will be quiet without too much dialogue and it will go through a day of her being there and as it is quiet and we don't know much, when it gets to night we then see her pull out objects that she has collected that day which could help her get out and then she will try and escape the prison but fail at the last hurdle. We will then skip to a new scene of her standing in court and the judge sentencing her for another amount of years for trying to escape the prison and killing two guards on her way out, it will be a short scene. It will then go back to the prison and she will be plotting another escape plan, and her dad will show up at her cell door, she will get out of prison and have to keep moving from place to place so that she is not found, but first she goes home where she has a layout of people she intends to take down, and then she will get out her weapons and gear and leave the house....
D. Luther trailer - Genre conventions:
- Mask
- Dark alley way
- Abandoned buildings
- Detectives car
- CCTV cameras
- Victim
- Villain
- Gun
- Policeman
- Crime scene
- Police tape
- Board of crime scene clue
- Big city - London
E. Openning scenes - 4 scenes:
Scene 1: Girl in prison living a day in prison and collecting things during the day and planning an escape, she then tries to escape and kills two guards on her way but she fails and is caught, the story will move on from a word of dialogue that is said by a security guard " your going to be here a lot longer than you thought."
Scene 2: Then it will be her in court having more years added to her sentence from the judge, and there will be conflict between the judge and her about the length of the sentence, the story will move on from the judge saying "Take her away" and it will then lead into the next scene.
Scene 3: Girl in prison again and has a knock on her cell door from a familiar face, her dad who is a policeman, and they have a discrete chat whilst looking away and he tells her to be ready tonight, he then helps her get out of prison and there is conflict between the father and girl as the argue a lot and between the dad and the other cops, because he cant be found out helping a prisoner. The scene will end with the girl saying "Now it begins".
Scene 4: Girl in her house getting a drink from the fridge and then looking at her wall with crossed out faces and people who are still alive but she wants to take down. This will be a short scene but the conflict will be between her and her dad about her carrying on with her mission and how she shouldn't do it and should just lay low for a while.
Draft script:
Cholland
Peer Feedback:
- Feedback 1
- Feedback 2
- Feedback 3
1. Add more detail to why the prison guards cant find her and how she gets away. Change The Rock to a cop?
2. Add some more parenthetical's and some longer pieces of dialogue.
3. Grammar sentence on page 2 - 'with her eyes are pointed towards the ceiling'.
4. Work on showing not telling, describe the emotions on peoples faces opposed to telling.
Final script:
Cholland Final
Shooting script:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/8j5vd34bp3bludc/shooting%20script%20%281%29.docx?dl=0
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